This game is amazing. I found it by coincidence some days ago. Since then, I nearly couldn't stop playing. I played till deep in the night, knowing I habe to get up early for work, but I just couldn't stop. When I got home from work, I hurried to eat and turned on my conputer, just to continue playing.
The development, the characters go through is genius. I think I don't lie if I say, everyone has a character in the game you can identify with or at least with the problems and feelings they have to go through. Since I am german, I had sometimes problems to understand some words and phrases. But even without beeing able to translate every single word, the feelings and everything else is getting to me. Hell I am not a very emotional person at all, but I nearly cried over the whole chapter 9. The story, the feelings, the whole thing caught me off guard.
Keep up with this brilliant masterpiece. I can't wait for the next update. This cliffhanger and the end of chapter 9 is allready killing me now, even I finished the chapter just 8 hours ago xD
It would be great, if you get the chance, when the game is finished one day, to implement some more languages. I think there would be millions of people, who would love to play this game, but aren't that good in english. Anyways, I will continue to play this game, when the next update is out. Also I will play it every now and then, see what changes, when I choose the other route.
Also I think I will just join patreon, to support this masterpiece. Indie Games like this, need every support, they can get, to get it known to people, all accross the world. Just now, where there are still people, hidding out there in their closet. Even its an adult game, the focus lies on the story and not on the sexual parts. And I think the story could help many teenagers accross the world, helping them to deal with their feelings.
Sorry this comment got so long, but I had to let you know this, cause this game really caught me. Keep up the brilliant and genius work and just cant wait till I can play the next chapter.
thank you for the lengthy and thoughtful response. Game progress will continue, in fact it will go full time starting in August and this will be the primary focus of my day. I'm optimistic that given the quality that we've pushed out so far, this will only increase when I have an extra 10 hours per day.
in terms of languages, yes, I would like to implmenent translations. I've had many offers over the years and i've mostly declined because the beginning of the game needs polished and reworked a bit. I didn't want to waste people's time with translating something that wasn't completed. That will likely change in the future. I'm also pleased that, despite me probably having a heavy American bias to the writing, I'm still pleased to hear that it translates to your as well. I want the game to be universal without making it' generic.
I'd gladly welcome the patreon support and there's plenty of supplemental stuff on there. That will only increase in the coming months with the job change and primary focus on this project. I don't know if i'm brilliant or not but i certainly like our approach at doing things a bit differently. Thanks for the support and hope you're safe--news has had some pretty hearbreaking images with flood damage out of Germany that looked devastating :(
You're welcome. No need ro hurry with the translations. Like I said, the meaning of the story and the emotional parts are transported very well, even if you dont understand every single word.
I am happy that I can help, even with a small charge on patreon. Allready did that this evening to show my support and thank you for your work on the game. Also allready joined your discord, to stay up to date xD
Yeah the flood here is terrible. Over 100 people allready died. Some small villages got nearly completely destroyed. And there are still hundreds of people missing. I live in rhineland-palatinate, one of the states that got hid by the flood. But I live in the south eastern part of the state and mostly the north got hit. But there still is danger, if it starts raining again within the next days
Oh, i see ya. I was in a call when you joined so i was sidetracked. Usually I try and say hey to everyone. Belated welcome and thanks again for the support. I hope you stay safe over there man <3
No prob. You deserve the support and I am glad I can be a little part of that support. Thx I try to stay safe. Here where I live, we should be save. And thx for the welcome <3
Your game is Brillant Aaryn. I am not usually into slow burn VN's but this one caught my attention. I hooked me so hard that I finished it in about 2 days.
The story is absolutely brillant and very engaging. As a writer myself I am pretty critical of what I am reading be it my work or others, but I was pleasantly surprised how well put together it was. In most VN's that I have read they are not as well thought out and rushed but this is a gem to be treasured.
I wish you well in your endevor and waiting for the next update.
On a side note. I cried when during the fire scenes and after as it felt real as it was happened right then. Though the bond between Zack and Braden is a powerful thing. Oh and Ashley's Character is amazing
It's always cool to get feedback from other writers. I've never identified as a writer and honestly, I'm still not sure that I do because I'm sorta just stumbling through this whole thing. It's even more empowering when people talk about having raw emotional reactions to various scenes. I've had many emotional reactions in writing them so it just feels cool when you can pass that along to others--specifically those that are more verse in the art of writing.
heh, Ash has skyrocketed to the top of the list for a lot of people. I've sorta joked on the Discord that I think I made a mistake and made the supporting character better than the mains, lol. He's soooo chaotic but warm then completely manipulative in the next scene. I pretty much shake my head every time I write him but he's super fun and has really grown on me
I actually have one that was fan made but I haven't gotten a change to really test it yet but it's in the works. This will be a more serious goal moving forward though since i'll have more time
Didn't read the game's description. Downloaded this coz it was M/M. Went in expected another lewd degen VN.
Ended up almost losing sleep and finished the whole thing in 2-sitting; and now I'm a big ball of mess thanks to the ending when I see who is on the other side of the door. Never ever have I cried over a visual novel. Mx. Aaryn and Mx. Blayke, y'all have me floored. I wanted moreeee! Never been invested in any characters of a visual novel before since they seem to be touch-and-go based on my very short experience in the genre, but y'all got me invested on these two men.
Thank you for making this! Definitely following for updates!
I just finished chapter 9, and, I have to say, one of the best VN's I've ever read/watched/whateveryoucallit. I had seen it on here, and had been hesitant to get it. Hot damn, am I glad I did! Went from start to end of chapter 9 in 2 sittings. I just couldn't put it down. To say I'm looking forward to more would be the understatement of the century.
I'm working thru some financial stuff, and had to drop all of my Patreon stuff, but, the MINUTE(and I do mean MINUTE) I get it sorted I will become one of your patrons. This work deserves to be made, and I would love to play a role in helping that happen.
Again, you've done an amazing job so far and I can't wait for more.
yo, thanks for the kind words and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I will say, don't worry about the Patreon stuff...no rush. I release this for free for a reason and only accept donations so please take care of yourself and those you love first before you throw cash over here. I appreciate it but I've also refunded people that I found out weren't in a good financial place at the time. I'm thankful for what I get but I'm not trying to short people, ya know? I hope things work out for you and I really appreciate the feedback <3
Okay. I just finished Chapter 9, and can't wait to play chapter 10. This game is a MASTERPIECE in my opinion. The story aspect is very good! "Slow burn", yes, but the character development in this game is amazing, like you can imagine that they're all real life people. Good job. Gonna patiently wait for chapter 10! Kudos to the developer!
heh...for my first time I'm sooooo shy when people call it a "masterpiece." It still has a ton of flaw--particularly the beginning and the visuals early on. I was a total newb. Glad you vibe with the characters, though. They've all grown on me in their own way--although, people seem to overwhelmingly have their favorite after Chapter 9 :p
No worries dude. Gonna play it again sometime while I wait, and explore all the routes that I didn't take. Thank you once again for this game. It broke me to the core.
Oh, I forgot. One thing that I would add (change?) to this game is a graphic for the characters name. sometimes it's really hard for me to know which character says what because it blends in with the background
yep, I want to change the UI for that reason. It's just been low on the priority list and I need to do some research into how to do it exactly. I changed the original text window a few years ago but that's been forever so I really wanna do some work there in the future
If I had to guess, you'll have the option to choose. If not, I'd image Zach would take one for the team. For Braden to jump from "straight" to full on power bottom would probably be a bit much for even him.
I've publicly stated before on the discord that I would prefer the reader have a choice so I plan on sticking with that unless the story specifically requires something different
no worries and hopefully that didn't come off sarcastic. I was just confirming that I was planning with what I had publicly stated before. In the past, I've changed my mind sometimes. I don't plot a lot of the story out and just sorta feel it out in real time; that way I get surprised at the outcomes too. More fun that way when even the writer doesn't get spoiled :p
I love your VN! Best one I have read! I am so looking forward to the future installments! I am not one to comment in threads, but I saw this topic and felt a desire to suggest one more option to the Top/Bottom choice (and maybe how the "choice" is going to be presented in the story dialog, this will be the case), but you might want to consider (which you probably already have) presenting an option where the characters are openly versatile, thus going back and forth between top and bottom is fluid with the story line. Readers would still be able to choose that a character be exclusively one way or the other, but this way, for readers like me, we can make the characters change positions from scene to scene without taking us out of the story.
I appreciate the suggestion. I'll weigh it appropriately. Part of suggestions like this are in the actual logistics. It's easy to have an idea for something like this that could easily inflate to several hundred pictures which can take way longer. However, I know what you're saying so I usually try and balance that (this is mostly because I have a way of creating way more pictures than I probably need just to make it more cinematic). I will say that I've always had a pretty good idea how a scene like that would play out and it may differ from how others would imagine it. The good news is, that in 3 years, that idea has never really changed so that's probably how things would play out if that ever happened. But who knows, I've changed my mind last minute before :)
i had no idea what i was expecting from this VN but i'm so glad to have downloaded it; an absolute gem. you've somehow made it possible to fall in love with every character, despite their quirks, and sometimes just downright weird antics. hands down one of the best experiences i've had in a while and can't wait for the next update.
Okay, I know nobody asked, but in the continuation where Ash goes into hyperactive detective mode, my head-canon went freakin wild before everything came out. I was convinced that Braden had come to the school all along to start the fire and that his family's business had some kind of lucrative renovation contract or insurance fraud scheme that Zack was supposed to be the fall guy for, hence Ernie and thermostatgate, but then feelz got in the way and s*@# was about to get real messy.
As it is, not sure why Braden found the most elaborate possible way to go about things, but I hope he never loses that side of himself <3
haha. that's a pretty detailed theory but it's kinda fun. In reality, I just wanted to mess with the people that were playing it for the porny reasons. I thought it was fun to flip the control that you usually see in adult games back on the player and have them actually get played instead but without Braden being the villain.
This is literally the best gay visual novel I've ever played. The writing is flawless, the characters are captivating and relatable, and the character development is excellent. I can't wait for the full release! A true masterpiece! Keep it up!
aww. two in a row here where people calling it a masterpiece. It's a work in progress and I really do wanna up the ante on it a bit when I get a chance. I just wanna make sure the story works before I go back and rewrite the beginning. Thanks a lot tho <3
Ahh, a tip on that, I know the story is based a lot on personal stuff, and I don't really want to undermine that, but can you re-write some of it so that it doesn't sound as rapey?
As in like something that really struck me the wrong way, which is a spoiler so if you are new to the game skip the next paragraph
when Braden admitted to literally rape Zack, and it was brushed off, and not the type of the sexual assault that Zack did, but literally raping someone in their sleep.
I really took a problem in that, since I don't really think it should have passed with not much emphasis, or it not being a diverging point in the storyline.
BTW I haven't played much beyond that due to the shock and of it all, so IDK if this get redeemed.
Generally I was really impressed with the game writing wise, the characters felt like real characters, it was complex/weird/fucked-up and the narrative was superb, it was the first sexual game where it managed to feel more than the sexual part of it, and honestly pushed so much further in its little details, it was the best visual novel I have played regardless of it being framed as a "sex game", my only minor issue was the pacing, in some of the scenes it felt quite off, which can be due to the nature of visual novels as a whole.
Overall I wish you would take the feedback regarding the rapey feel into consideration, and good luck with the game development!!
Honestly, this is one of the things that I liked about the adult genre is because there are no limits with the narrative. It actually lets me take a lot of the tropes and sexual situations from other adult games that people are used to doing and actually make them play out more realistically. I think the scene has a lot of context to it and the characters talk at length about it given the purpose of that entire route comes back to communication and boundaries in relationships. I'll also note that that actual "rapey" tone of the game that your'e referencing only happens in one route based on what the player actually chose. So if you actually chose to touch him ("rapey" context of the pervy route) then the game assumed you were ok with the consequences of that. However, the game does flip that back around because there were consequences for that decision and the dialogue throughout the game actually shows that neither of the characters were ever down with it in the first place. There's even a line that Zack says after you make the pervy choice stating that it feels like someone else made the choice for him. I actually wanted the characters to fight back against the reader to some degree because it wasn't in their nature but if the reader forces that choice by selecting the pervy route then it becomes canon and everyone, including the reader, has to deal with the guilt and consequences of that. Most adult games don't have a consequence for your actions and I wanted to clearly show that while also showing a way for characters to try and talk out something terrible that they were truly sorry for in that specific route.
heh, aww. well thank you. it has a long way to go. hopefully I can get a chance to rework the beginning now that I've learned a thing or twelve over the last few years
Ok, I left a rating but had to say it here too... Fucking best BL VN ever!!!
Loving everything! So much that after 3 days non-stop, I yelled when the "to be continued" page appeared! Sorting out the Patreon thingy now to support, mate. You rock!
Haha. dont hate me for the cliffhangers; that's sorta been a staple on this game for a loooong time. I appreciate the support and love the love. It really does make a difference <3
Hi, I just wanted to give a heads-up that the game works perfectly on Linux, too. I just downloaded the PC version and it includes a "Str8.sh" executable that launches the game without any issues (tested on Debian 9 and Ubuntu 20.04). So if you guys want to advertise it as a Linux-compatible game you don't need any changes at all :-)
I just created an account so I could praise you for the quality character development you're putting into this story - it's really something special and I've been enjoying the updates since I discovered this work (back around the time only Part IV was written). The latest part really impressed me with the additional backstory for some of the supporting characters.
Eagerly awaiting future updates on your work, Aaryn!
I'm glad it's still holding up. There's been a lot of changes in the characters; most of which i think was for the better. I'm glad you've been along for the ride so much. Hopefully it manages to continue with the same trajectory.
It's hard to know what to say here. Honestly I found this novel while looking for something a little more amorous, but this was so much better, enough so that I felt the need to create an account and comment for the first time ever. The characters you've created and the story is absolutely fantastic, especially Braden. Honestly, watching the struggles of these characters to figure themselves out, and navigate through their situation was exceptionally relatable, and even made me stop and take another look at myself.
Your novel actually inspired me to do something I've been wanting to do for quite a while, and start writing. Not a graphic novel like this, no talent for graphics, and much like Zack, no sense of style. So, in short, thank you for this great story, and keep up the good work!
I appreciate this. I love first time posters and it means even more to inspire someone else, especially when I'm so new at this. I really wanted to try and create something that's not only fun to read but really wanted to make people think introspectively. Glad it hit the mark
This is the most beautiful novel I have ever read before truly I read a lot of novels but yours take the first place!!, you have done an absolutely incredible job at this and I love it!.
Thank you so much for this amazing story and I can't wait for the rest:)
I love it I love it I love it, but if you remember my Nick you already know, but I could not not write it here. I think this is the real Visual Novel... A magnificent writing, a beautiful plot and a development done really well with a perfect rhythm, many are lost in writing or timing or in characters that then change and instead not here everything is practically perfect and even if to some it may seem a bit surreal for the world today, There are still people who get excited and have deep feelings and live this way. I keep telling you I love you, your heart, Zack and Brayden. I’ve been waiting for 3-4 months for a new update... but it’s okay I already know that it will be worth it
Prior to downloading this game I was not a fan of 3D rendered visuals novels. Straight?! has absolutely changed my perspective. Aaryn (and Blayke shoutout to co-writers), your art and skill as storytellers have left me absolutely enchanted. I am so appreciative of the complex relationships and characters you have created. I downloaded this visual novel as a quick distraction during finals week and found myself quickly immersed in Zack's story. I am a Master's student studying Sexuality and you've managed to capture the dynamics and the struggles of establishing one's own sexual identity in such a relatable way. I could write an entire article analyzing your work, but I'll wait until it's finished :) It's truly beautiful and I can't wait to see where your story takes us next! Thank you!
Pervy Sidenote: If Zack is naturally such a great kisser, I can't wait to see what else that mouth do.. haha <3
I swore I responded to this comment and idk why but it never posted I guess. I'm behind on replies so I apologize for taking forever. So i really appreciate the educational aspect from a master's level student; especially one specifically studying sexuality. I think the dynamics hold up. They won't describe everyone's experience but they describe things that have been true to me and things that I struggled with. I wanted to share that but also show a way out of it in the hopes that it would validate others. Don't analyze me too closely though, this is my first time :p
i will likely try and put out an android port after the next update. Right now, the current code has a significant number of writing completed for the current update that's still being written so it's in transition. i can't export it until i get to a new stopping point
I was surprised how mature, beautifully written this game is and how you balanced nudity with the story. It's great that you kept it subtle and more realistic so it didn't became another annoying porn game :) It must have taken a lot of work, I hope you don't stop soon: D
Only a few things seemed little weird to me, but I'm not going to write it here to spoil it.
And I can't hear any sound/music even with slider on max in game settings. Not sure if it's just a my problem or there is just slider without purpose.
hey thanks. I'm glad you appreciated the story-focused approach rather than just blatant adult content with no purpose. Right now there is no sound so everything on your end is working fine. Just haven't gotten that far yet. It's still in production.
heya. thanks a lot and I appreciate the thoughts. So from a technical writing point, I think you're right: a lot of the conflict in this isn't long-term and structurally, it could have been planned better from a narrative point of view--that is, if i knew how to write at the time, lol. I've never planned anything like this before so if you want an idea of how it is to actually have a conversation with me about planning and outlining, I'll just reference Ash in Chapter 9 and that should give you an adequate comparison :P
That being said, I will admit that many of the conflicts in this game are purposely resolved quickly because i really wanted to write it as a template for people who have struggled with these issues to get some type of idea for how to resolve them. Zack's character has a lot of anxiety and a lot of inhibition about things (and to be honest, I did, too). So you see him actually resolve these conflicts in the game as I began to slowly resolve them and work them out through the characters. I started writing this for me. But the conflicts in this really serve as a potential way for people to use that example and try to resolve their own conflicts if they've suffered similarly. I'm just showing people how it worked out in my head and what lessons resonated with me. So basically, if i strung that idea out over the course of the narrative, storybook wise it would have worked but the real reason i'm writing this is to work through my own shit and maybe help other people in the process so i didn't want the resolution to be too far from the problem so people could still make the connections.
not sure if that justifies it or not but a lot of that was on purpose just because of the nature and reasoning behind the project
I'm not opposed to putting it on other platforms or anything and I'm also ok with people freely sharing the game once it's public. I just discourage people doing it before I release it because it costs me thousands to make and I'd like to try and continue to bolster that and see if I can actually support myself with this gig. However, I'm very adamant that the game will remain free so I'm not sure how that works with some platforms like Steam. If they force me to charge for the game, then it wont be on that platform
I just reached the current end point of the story and I feel like I had to comment on here as I have so many things I want to say. No spoilers here but first and foremost, this wasn't what I was expecting, like at all!
I don't even know where to start with the praise I have for this. I have spent the past few evenings playing through the story and have experienced so many different emotions. The character development is so excellent and the writing so in-depth that it really does make you care about and root for the boys. Never did I think for a moment that a visual novel like this would pull me in so hard. I have literally found myself laughing out loud, feeling rather horny and most surprisingly of all, and I'm not ashamed to say it, welling up with emotion more than a couple of times. This story really got to me, in a good way. There are some truly beautiful moments in this story, and that goes for both the images and the writing. All just so.... unexpected, but very welcome. I'm so glad I decided to give this a try. And to think that it's all still a work in progress as well!
I feel like I still have so much more I want to say about this brilliant story. I have already become a patron and look forward to chatting to others about it on Discord.
yo, thanks for the note. I like surprising people with this and people checking in as they try and process their reactions to it never gets old. so thanks for that. I've been really busy with work lately so I've been a little slower on the discord but say hey for sure :)
My surprise is genuine, I just would have never expected to fall so much in love with the characters you have created, the way they have been written and the writing in general is so true to life and has brought up so many feelings and memories for me. Obviously much praise needs to be given for the images you have clearly painstakingly created, but for me, it's the writing and story development here that makes this stand out!
You nailed my thoughts to a T with this comment. I'm currently after the part where Braden picks out clothes and a hair cut for Zack, and I am so head over heels in love with this couple, and I really hope it ends with a happy ending once said and done. Over the years, seeing too many gay couple movies fall apart by the end, it's really become depressing. We need a happy forever and ever story for once. I just had to reply to this comment because you 1000% described my feelings about it. Thank you kindly ❣️
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Almost died as they went a-hole at chap9 even fucked me up more as they'll about to get separated and i dont give a shit if its just a 20mins walk, i fucking love both of them together, and then outta nowhere here comes ash, their "spirit animal" saved both of their ass from near relationship death. Well done to the story btw, im looking forward to your future works. Keep it up mah man!
I came into this novel when chapter 9 was being worked on.
I will gladly admit that when I came across this novel, I was looking for something raunchy.
I even skipped through so much dialogue thinking that there would be sex scenes involved eventually. However, after chapter 9 came out, the ending for Chapter 9's (pervy) really surprised me. It made something click that this was actually a serious and GOOD novel.
So I went back and went with the (Respect) route, boy am I glad.
Once the prologue was done, the story really started to hit me.
This story has me so hooked I keep wanting more.
I am checking everyday for updates on how the chapter(s) are going.
It is a book I want to keep turning the pages of, that never ends.
I want to follow these two until their entire lives are at an end of old age. To see their character development.
With that said, creativity takes time. (but not too much time! lol)
Novels like these that explore the depths of sexuality and character development are what I thrive on.
There is so much to learn and explain through experiences.
I know this novel must end at some point, but writing like this, with such character growth, is an art to be encouraged.
If this is a career you wish to endeavor, I say keep encouraging yourself to explore it.
This novel alone, shows the ability to express emotion, experiences, and individuality.
-My take away from the story-
The fact that these two became comfortable with each other's sexuality really spoke to me.
I'm a gay man most people think is straight, have sexual anxiety, and I'm also a very openly sexual person; I mean in the way that I am very comfortable with conversations about sex .
Not many people are, and the growth between these two really showed that it is okay to talk about your feelings regarding sexuality and relationships.
Braden in particular, I think, is a wonderful character development.
It really shows how much sexuality is not black and white.
You do not need to be gay in order to love someone of the same sex, even if it is one or two person(s).
It is the same for a vice versa situation. e.g. woman loving a man while typically loving women.
The labels of sexuality are too much confined into a box, labeled as such, and too many people are discouraged from exploring their love and desires because they have been taught there are only a few ways your sexuality can go.
If you love one thing, one or several times, it does not define you indefinitely.
It also discourages people talking about such things and then eventually have that eat away at them.
It may sound hippie, but you literally can love ANYONE.
Even discussing same sex with a person who typically loves the opposite sex is okay, but too often those person(s) feel out of place because they feel if they go down that route it will define them and immediately put a generic label on them.
Relationships are not only about wanting sex, it is about choosing a life partner. Even if you love a man or a woman, that does not mean you can only love "that side".
-What I personally wish for the two characters (though clearly the author is doing a good job as it is)-
I think there should be a scene(s) showing that Braden DOES indeed like women still. I don't wish for "cheating", but even a comment or glance at a beautiful woman would solidify the fact that he is not "turning gay"
I also hope these two do not end this relationship forever.
There is too much invested between the two of them to simply throw away and claim it as a "friendship"
Though i believe friends of any gender can be close as these two have expressed outside of the "sex" scenes.
I believe it would be sad for these two to grow so entwined together that they do not commit to each other as life partners.
Though this is not intended as a "porn" novel it would be fantastic to see a few sex scenes between these two, only to show how much they love and care about having the other "feel good".
I say a few only in the fact to show it is not a "one time thing" and that they are actually expressing their love to each other this way.
Either way, keep up the fantastic job, keep growing this art; if you wish.
wow, sooo much going on here. I can tell the story impacted you and I take it as a compliment that the ending of chapter 9 made you go back and actually read through everything.
I'm glad you're open to the lot of what the story is suggesting; and while the themes in the game aren't meant to be preachy, I hope they lay a foundation for others to start from if they've faced their own struggles; a blueprint if you will. While it's adult oriented, there really is an intention to break new ground with this game and do something special so thanks for giving it a second shot ( i know the beginning is weak). I appreciate the support and I really appreciated the lengthy input and reaction to this project so thank you sincerely.
this game resonated with me enough that i created an account to leave a comment/review, which is saying something because i'm really socially awkward. i really related to zack because his emotional experience with braden reminded me so much of something i've been through, and it made me cry, and it's kind of painful and i just love this so much. when i first started to play, the writing immediately captured me because it was funny and clever, and it's only gotten better as i've played. i downloaded the game for something quick and sexy, but this is so much more, and it's really a beautiful story. i haven't reached chapter nine yet, but i already can't wait for you to continue.
I always love these messages where people signed up just to comment. that means a lot. Sorry about the crying but i'm glad it hit you on that level. It's been kinda fun turning the genre upside down. I hope you enjoy chapter 9, too. I think it turned out alright :)
i did get through chapter one and ash is the most absolutely adorable character ever. i love him with all my heart, and i love the game even more if possible.
This game was the first game I've ever played in my life that compelled me to write an actually review, even tho my review was pretty short. I downloaded this at first expecting a quick and hot short story but I was blown away at how complex it was and how it made me feel. I honestly thing I've even learned some things about myself from Zack's story and I can't wait to play more!
I really appreciate this. This is def one of the things that I was after. I wanted to make people think and I wanted to show the progression of someone accepting themselves rather than just relying on lame concepts like having "pride," "acceptance," or even "love" for yourself. While those are solid goals, sometimes people have a really hard time understanding how to get from where they are to that point and we really don't see good ways to do that. I really wanted to show a realistic progression. Now whether that applies to everyone or not, who knows...but maybe if it gives people a template, it can help them find their own way :)
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This game is amazing. I found it by coincidence some days ago. Since then, I nearly couldn't stop playing. I played till deep in the night, knowing I habe to get up early for work, but I just couldn't stop. When I got home from work, I hurried to eat and turned on my conputer, just to continue playing.
The development, the characters go through is genius. I think I don't lie if I say, everyone has a character in the game you can identify with or at least with the problems and feelings they have to go through. Since I am german, I had sometimes problems to understand some words and phrases. But even without beeing able to translate every single word, the feelings and everything else is getting to me. Hell I am not a very emotional person at all, but I nearly cried over the whole chapter 9. The story, the feelings, the whole thing caught me off guard.
Keep up with this brilliant masterpiece. I can't wait for the next update. This cliffhanger and the end of chapter 9 is allready killing me now, even I finished the chapter just 8 hours ago xD
It would be great, if you get the chance, when the game is finished one day, to implement some more languages. I think there would be millions of people, who would love to play this game, but aren't that good in english. Anyways, I will continue to play this game, when the next update is out. Also I will play it every now and then, see what changes, when I choose the other route.
Also I think I will just join patreon, to support this masterpiece. Indie Games like this, need every support, they can get, to get it known to people, all accross the world. Just now, where there are still people, hidding out there in their closet. Even its an adult game, the focus lies on the story and not on the sexual parts. And I think the story could help many teenagers accross the world, helping them to deal with their feelings.
Sorry this comment got so long, but I had to let you know this, cause this game really caught me. Keep up the brilliant and genius work and just cant wait till I can play the next chapter.
thank you for the lengthy and thoughtful response. Game progress will continue, in fact it will go full time starting in August and this will be the primary focus of my day. I'm optimistic that given the quality that we've pushed out so far, this will only increase when I have an extra 10 hours per day.
in terms of languages, yes, I would like to implmenent translations. I've had many offers over the years and i've mostly declined because the beginning of the game needs polished and reworked a bit. I didn't want to waste people's time with translating something that wasn't completed. That will likely change in the future. I'm also pleased that, despite me probably having a heavy American bias to the writing, I'm still pleased to hear that it translates to your as well. I want the game to be universal without making it' generic.
I'd gladly welcome the patreon support and there's plenty of supplemental stuff on there. That will only increase in the coming months with the job change and primary focus on this project. I don't know if i'm brilliant or not but i certainly like our approach at doing things a bit differently. Thanks for the support and hope you're safe--news has had some pretty hearbreaking images with flood damage out of Germany that looked devastating :(
You're welcome. No need ro hurry with the translations. Like I said, the meaning of the story and the emotional parts are transported very well, even if you dont understand every single word.
I am happy that I can help, even with a small charge on patreon. Allready did that this evening to show my support and thank you for your work on the game. Also allready joined your discord, to stay up to date xD
Yeah the flood here is terrible. Over 100 people allready died. Some small villages got nearly completely destroyed. And there are still hundreds of people missing. I live in rhineland-palatinate, one of the states that got hid by the flood. But I live in the south eastern part of the state and mostly the north got hit. But there still is danger, if it starts raining again within the next days
Oh, i see ya. I was in a call when you joined so i was sidetracked. Usually I try and say hey to everyone. Belated welcome and thanks again for the support. I hope you stay safe over there man <3
No prob. You deserve the support and I am glad I can be a little part of that support. Thx I try to stay safe. Here where I live, we should be save. And thx for the welcome <3
Your game is Brillant Aaryn. I am not usually into slow burn VN's but this one caught my attention. I hooked me so hard that I finished it in about 2 days.
The story is absolutely brillant and very engaging. As a writer myself I am pretty critical of what I am reading be it my work or others, but I was pleasantly surprised how well put together it was. In most VN's that I have read they are not as well thought out and rushed but this is a gem to be treasured.
I wish you well in your endevor and waiting for the next update.
On a side note. I cried when during the fire scenes and after as it felt real as it was happened right then. Though the bond between Zack and Braden is a powerful thing. Oh and Ashley's Character is amazing
It's always cool to get feedback from other writers. I've never identified as a writer and honestly, I'm still not sure that I do because I'm sorta just stumbling through this whole thing. It's even more empowering when people talk about having raw emotional reactions to various scenes. I've had many emotional reactions in writing them so it just feels cool when you can pass that along to others--specifically those that are more verse in the art of writing.
heh, Ash has skyrocketed to the top of the list for a lot of people. I've sorta joked on the Discord that I think I made a mistake and made the supporting character better than the mains, lol. He's soooo chaotic but warm then completely manipulative in the next scene. I pretty much shake my head every time I write him but he's super fun and has really grown on me
same here same here except the being a writer part lol
will you be releasing an android version?
I actually have one that was fan made but I haven't gotten a change to really test it yet but it's in the works. This will be a more serious goal moving forward though since i'll have more time
Sounds good, awesome VN, Will be easier to access for me once it's in Android. Thanks again for such a great story and visuals.
Didn't read the game's description. Downloaded this coz it was M/M. Went in expected another lewd degen VN.
Ended up almost losing sleep and finished the whole thing in 2-sitting; and now I'm a big ball of mess thanks to the ending when I see who is on the other side of the door. Never ever have I cried over a visual novel. Mx. Aaryn and Mx. Blayke, y'all have me floored. I wanted moreeee! Never been invested in any characters of a visual novel before since they seem to be touch-and-go based on my very short experience in the genre, but y'all got me invested on these two men.
Thank you for making this! Definitely following for updates!
heh, thanks a lot. there's more coming. it's nice to surprise people :)
I just finished chapter 9, and, I have to say, one of the best VN's I've ever read/watched/whateveryoucallit. I had seen it on here, and had been hesitant to get it. Hot damn, am I glad I did! Went from start to end of chapter 9 in 2 sittings. I just couldn't put it down. To say I'm looking forward to more would be the understatement of the century.
I'm working thru some financial stuff, and had to drop all of my Patreon stuff, but, the MINUTE(and I do mean MINUTE) I get it sorted I will become one of your patrons. This work deserves to be made, and I would love to play a role in helping that happen.
Again, you've done an amazing job so far and I can't wait for more.
yo, thanks for the kind words and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I will say, don't worry about the Patreon stuff...no rush. I release this for free for a reason and only accept donations so please take care of yourself and those you love first before you throw cash over here. I appreciate it but I've also refunded people that I found out weren't in a good financial place at the time. I'm thankful for what I get but I'm not trying to short people, ya know? I hope things work out for you and I really appreciate the feedback <3
Okay. I just finished Chapter 9, and can't wait to play chapter 10. This game is a MASTERPIECE in my opinion. The story aspect is very good! "Slow burn", yes, but the character development in this game is amazing, like you can imagine that they're all real life people. Good job. Gonna patiently wait for chapter 10! Kudos to the developer!
heh...for my first time I'm sooooo shy when people call it a "masterpiece." It still has a ton of flaw--particularly the beginning and the visuals early on. I was a total newb. Glad you vibe with the characters, though. They've all grown on me in their own way--although, people seem to overwhelmingly have their favorite after Chapter 9 :p
No worries dude. Gonna play it again sometime while I wait, and explore all the routes that I didn't take. Thank you once again for this game. It broke me to the core.
we'll get through it together. Dont think it doesn't break me to write it. I lost control of these characters a long time ago
Oh, I forgot. One thing that I would add (change?) to this game is a graphic for the characters name. sometimes it's really hard for me to know which character says what because it blends in with the background
yep, I want to change the UI for that reason. It's just been low on the priority list and I need to do some research into how to do it exactly. I changed the original text window a few years ago but that's been forever so I really wanna do some work there in the future
Can Zach be the top in the nsfw scenes?
as it stands right now, the reader will likely have a choice if things get to that point
question will braden be top or bottom
If I had to guess, you'll have the option to choose. If not, I'd image Zach would take one for the team. For Braden to jump from "straight" to full on power bottom would probably be a bit much for even him.
tbh i was hoping so cause i'd pick the option to bottom for him lol
I think it will be fun watching Zach trying to squeeze that massive dong in him. 😁 Trying being the operative word.
loll i agree!
I've publicly stated before on the discord that I would prefer the reader have a choice so I plan on sticking with that unless the story specifically requires something different
ahhh i see, love that idea. i wasnt really in the discord at that time so i wouldnt know xd.
no worries and hopefully that didn't come off sarcastic. I was just confirming that I was planning with what I had publicly stated before. In the past, I've changed my mind sometimes. I don't plot a lot of the story out and just sorta feel it out in real time; that way I get surprised at the outcomes too. More fun that way when even the writer doesn't get spoiled :p
nono your fine lol, and thats a good fun way to make a story. love that.
I love your VN! Best one I have read! I am so looking forward to the future installments! I am not one to comment in threads, but I saw this topic and felt a desire to suggest one more option to the Top/Bottom choice (and maybe how the "choice" is going to be presented in the story dialog, this will be the case), but you might want to consider (which you probably already have) presenting an option where the characters are openly versatile, thus going back and forth between top and bottom is fluid with the story line. Readers would still be able to choose that a character be exclusively one way or the other, but this way, for readers like me, we can make the characters change positions from scene to scene without taking us out of the story.
I appreciate the suggestion. I'll weigh it appropriately. Part of suggestions like this are in the actual logistics. It's easy to have an idea for something like this that could easily inflate to several hundred pictures which can take way longer. However, I know what you're saying so I usually try and balance that (this is mostly because I have a way of creating way more pictures than I probably need just to make it more cinematic). I will say that I've always had a pretty good idea how a scene like that would play out and it may differ from how others would imagine it. The good news is, that in 3 years, that idea has never really changed so that's probably how things would play out if that ever happened. But who knows, I've changed my mind last minute before :)
Is Straight considered abandonware now? It's been about 6 months with the only progress being the outline at 10%.
i sure hope not :(
the last post on patreon is jun 1st so i dont think so
No. it's not abandoned. I'm still working on it
i had no idea what i was expecting from this VN but i'm so glad to have downloaded it; an absolute gem. you've somehow made it possible to fall in love with every character, despite their quirks, and sometimes just downright weird antics. hands down one of the best experiences i've had in a while and can't wait for the next update.
awww. thanks a ton <3
Hope it gets released on Android Too
This actually may happen very soon
I love this Novel in the making..
<3
Great game!
SPOILERS AHEAD (kinda)
Okay, I know nobody asked, but in the continuation where Ash goes into hyperactive detective mode, my head-canon went freakin wild before everything came out. I was convinced that Braden had come to the school all along to start the fire and that his family's business had some kind of lucrative renovation contract or insurance fraud scheme that Zack was supposed to be the fall guy for, hence Ernie and thermostatgate, but then feelz got in the way and s*@# was about to get real messy.
As it is, not sure why Braden found the most elaborate possible way to go about things, but I hope he never loses that side of himself <3
Keep up the good work!
haha. that's a pretty detailed theory but it's kinda fun. In reality, I just wanted to mess with the people that were playing it for the porny reasons. I thought it was fun to flip the control that you usually see in adult games back on the player and have them actually get played instead but without Braden being the villain.
Allegorically turning up the heat but not in the way we expected, how smart...
This is literally the best gay visual novel I've ever played. The writing is flawless, the characters are captivating and relatable, and the character development is excellent. I can't wait for the full release! A true masterpiece! Keep it up!
aww. two in a row here where people calling it a masterpiece. It's a work in progress and I really do wanna up the ante on it a bit when I get a chance. I just wanna make sure the story works before I go back and rewrite the beginning. Thanks a lot tho <3
Ahh, a tip on that, I know the story is based a lot on personal stuff, and I don't really want to undermine that, but can you re-write some of it so that it doesn't sound as rapey?
As in like something that really struck me the wrong way, which is a spoiler so if you are new to the game skip the next paragraph
when Braden admitted to literally rape Zack, and it was brushed off, and not the type of the sexual assault that Zack did, but literally raping someone in their sleep.I really took a problem in that, since I don't really think it should have passed with not much emphasis, or it not being a diverging point in the storyline.
BTW I haven't played much beyond that due to the shock and of it all, so IDK if this get redeemed.
Generally I was really impressed with the game writing wise, the characters felt like real characters, it was complex/weird/fucked-up and the narrative was superb, it was the first sexual game where it managed to feel more than the sexual part of it, and honestly pushed so much further in its little details, it was the best visual novel I have played regardless of it being framed as a "sex game", my only minor issue was the pacing, in some of the scenes it felt quite off, which can be due to the nature of visual novels as a whole.
Overall I wish you would take the feedback regarding the rapey feel into consideration, and good luck with the game development!!
Honestly, this is one of the things that I liked about the adult genre is because there are no limits with the narrative. It actually lets me take a lot of the tropes and sexual situations from other adult games that people are used to doing and actually make them play out more realistically. I think the scene has a lot of context to it and the characters talk at length about it given the purpose of that entire route comes back to communication and boundaries in relationships. I'll also note that that actual "rapey" tone of the game that your'e referencing only happens in one route based on what the player actually chose. So if you actually chose to touch him ("rapey" context of the pervy route) then the game assumed you were ok with the consequences of that. However, the game does flip that back around because there were consequences for that decision and the dialogue throughout the game actually shows that neither of the characters were ever down with it in the first place. There's even a line that Zack says after you make the pervy choice stating that it feels like someone else made the choice for him. I actually wanted the characters to fight back against the reader to some degree because it wasn't in their nature but if the reader forces that choice by selecting the pervy route then it becomes canon and everyone, including the reader, has to deal with the guilt and consequences of that. Most adult games don't have a consequence for your actions and I wanted to clearly show that while also showing a way for characters to try and talk out something terrible that they were truly sorry for in that specific route.
I love this so much! A freaking masterpiece!! Keep up the good work!! :D
heh, aww. well thank you. it has a long way to go. hopefully I can get a chance to rework the beginning now that I've learned a thing or twelve over the last few years
Ok, I left a rating but had to say it here too... Fucking best BL VN ever!!!
Loving everything! So much that after 3 days non-stop, I yelled when the "to be continued" page appeared! Sorting out the Patreon thingy now to support, mate. You rock!
Haha. dont hate me for the cliffhangers; that's sorta been a staple on this game for a loooong time. I appreciate the support and love the love. It really does make a difference <3
Hi, I just wanted to give a heads-up that the game works perfectly on Linux, too. I just downloaded the PC version and it includes a "Str8.sh" executable that launches the game without any issues (tested on Debian 9 and Ubuntu 20.04). So if you guys want to advertise it as a Linux-compatible game you don't need any changes at all :-)
I appreciate it. we had someone trying to figure out Linux on the discord about a week ago
I just created an account so I could praise you for the quality character development you're putting into this story - it's really something special and I've been enjoying the updates since I discovered this work (back around the time only Part IV was written). The latest part really impressed me with the additional backstory for some of the supporting characters.
Eagerly awaiting future updates on your work, Aaryn!
I'm glad it's still holding up. There's been a lot of changes in the characters; most of which i think was for the better. I'm glad you've been along for the ride so much. Hopefully it manages to continue with the same trajectory.
Love this story excited for the next update
<3
It's hard to know what to say here. Honestly I found this novel while looking for something a little more amorous, but this was so much better, enough so that I felt the need to create an account and comment for the first time ever. The characters you've created and the story is absolutely fantastic, especially Braden. Honestly, watching the struggles of these characters to figure themselves out, and navigate through their situation was exceptionally relatable, and even made me stop and take another look at myself.
Your novel actually inspired me to do something I've been wanting to do for quite a while, and start writing. Not a graphic novel like this, no talent for graphics, and much like Zack, no sense of style. So, in short, thank you for this great story, and keep up the good work!
I appreciate this. I love first time posters and it means even more to inspire someone else, especially when I'm so new at this. I really wanted to try and create something that's not only fun to read but really wanted to make people think introspectively. Glad it hit the mark
This is the most beautiful novel I have ever read before truly I read a lot of novels but yours take the first place!!, you have done an absolutely incredible job at this and I love it!.
Thank you so much for this amazing story and I can't wait for the rest:)
aww. thank you very much. You're very kind. I appreciate the love. Stay tuned. It's slow progress right now but I'm working on it <3
Nice work, mainly the graphics, the hardest part for me.
Thank you for your work.
thanks a lot <3
;-)
Would you ever make this available for android?
Use Joi play app it works perfectly 😉
what do you use to make the 3D models? I love the writing of the game btw
Use Daz3D for the models and thanks, I feel like I'm getting better
I love it I love it I love it, but if you remember my Nick you already know, but I could not not write it here. I think this is the real Visual Novel... A magnificent writing, a beautiful plot and a development done really well with a perfect rhythm, many are lost in writing or timing or in characters that then change and instead not here everything is practically perfect and even if to some it may seem a bit surreal for the world today, There are still people who get excited and have deep feelings and live this way. I keep telling you I love you, your heart, Zack and Brayden. I’ve been waiting for 3-4 months for a new update... but it’s okay I already know that it will be worth it
heh. thanks a lot. i appreciate the love and enthusiasm.
Android 😢 Huhuhu 😢
i know. i just haven't gotten around to it yet. dont hate me
Prior to downloading this game I was not a fan of 3D rendered visuals novels. Straight?! has absolutely changed my perspective. Aaryn (and Blayke shoutout to co-writers), your art and skill as storytellers have left me absolutely enchanted. I am so appreciative of the complex relationships and characters you have created. I downloaded this visual novel as a quick distraction during finals week and found myself quickly immersed in Zack's story. I am a Master's student studying Sexuality and you've managed to capture the dynamics and the struggles of establishing one's own sexual identity in such a relatable way. I could write an entire article analyzing your work, but I'll wait until it's finished :) It's truly beautiful and I can't wait to see where your story takes us next! Thank you!
Pervy Sidenote: If Zack is naturally such a great kisser, I can't wait to see what else that mouth do.. haha <3
I swore I responded to this comment and idk why but it never posted I guess. I'm behind on replies so I apologize for taking forever. So i really appreciate the educational aspect from a master's level student; especially one specifically studying sexuality. I think the dynamics hold up. They won't describe everyone's experience but they describe things that have been true to me and things that I struggled with. I wanted to share that but also show a way out of it in the hopes that it would validate others. Don't analyze me too closely though, this is my first time :p
Discord dont work
Not sure why it's not working. Try this one
https://discord.com/invite/qAG3qek
vai ter um personagem mais velho no jogo?
Not at this time. I'm focusing on just one route and trying to make that the best I can
Hello! When will it be available on android? I really really want to play this game. 😢
i will likely try and put out an android port after the next update. Right now, the current code has a significant number of writing completed for the current update that's still being written so it's in transition. i can't export it until i get to a new stopping point
Thanks for noticing 😁 Hope to play it 😆
I was surprised how mature, beautifully written this game is and how you balanced nudity with the story. It's great that you kept it subtle and more realistic so it didn't became another annoying porn game :) It must have taken a lot of work, I hope you don't stop soon: D
Only a few things seemed little weird to me, but I'm not going to write it here to spoil it.
And I can't hear any sound/music even with slider on max in game settings. Not sure if it's just a my problem or there is just slider without purpose.
hey thanks. I'm glad you appreciated the story-focused approach rather than just blatant adult content with no purpose. Right now there is no sound so everything on your end is working fine. Just haven't gotten that far yet. It's still in production.
heya. thanks a lot and I appreciate the thoughts. So from a technical writing point, I think you're right: a lot of the conflict in this isn't long-term and structurally, it could have been planned better from a narrative point of view--that is, if i knew how to write at the time, lol. I've never planned anything like this before so if you want an idea of how it is to actually have a conversation with me about planning and outlining, I'll just reference Ash in Chapter 9 and that should give you an adequate comparison :P
That being said, I will admit that many of the conflicts in this game are purposely resolved quickly because i really wanted to write it as a template for people who have struggled with these issues to get some type of idea for how to resolve them. Zack's character has a lot of anxiety and a lot of inhibition about things (and to be honest, I did, too). So you see him actually resolve these conflicts in the game as I began to slowly resolve them and work them out through the characters. I started writing this for me. But the conflicts in this really serve as a potential way for people to use that example and try to resolve their own conflicts if they've suffered similarly. I'm just showing people how it worked out in my head and what lessons resonated with me. So basically, if i strung that idea out over the course of the narrative, storybook wise it would have worked but the real reason i'm writing this is to work through my own shit and maybe help other people in the process so i didn't want the resolution to be too far from the problem so people could still make the connections.
not sure if that justifies it or not but a lot of that was on purpose just because of the nature and reasoning behind the project
I'm not opposed to putting it on other platforms or anything and I'm also ok with people freely sharing the game once it's public. I just discourage people doing it before I release it because it costs me thousands to make and I'd like to try and continue to bolster that and see if I can actually support myself with this gig. However, I'm very adamant that the game will remain free so I'm not sure how that works with some platforms like Steam. If they force me to charge for the game, then it wont be on that platform
please make an android port
I'm looking into it
I just reached the current end point of the story and I feel like I had to comment on here as I have so many things I want to say. No spoilers here but first and foremost, this wasn't what I was expecting, like at all!
I don't even know where to start with the praise I have for this. I have spent the past few evenings playing through the story and have experienced so many different emotions. The character development is so excellent and the writing so in-depth that it really does make you care about and root for the boys. Never did I think for a moment that a visual novel like this would pull me in so hard. I have literally found myself laughing out loud, feeling rather horny and most surprisingly of all, and I'm not ashamed to say it, welling up with emotion more than a couple of times. This story really got to me, in a good way. There are some truly beautiful moments in this story, and that goes for both the images and the writing. All just so.... unexpected, but very welcome. I'm so glad I decided to give this a try. And to think that it's all still a work in progress as well!
I feel like I still have so much more I want to say about this brilliant story. I have already become a patron and look forward to chatting to others about it on Discord.
Thank you 😊
yo, thanks for the note. I like surprising people with this and people checking in as they try and process their reactions to it never gets old. so thanks for that. I've been really busy with work lately so I've been a little slower on the discord but say hey for sure :)
My surprise is genuine, I just would have never expected to fall so much in love with the characters you have created, the way they have been written and the writing in general is so true to life and has brought up so many feelings and memories for me. Obviously much praise needs to be given for the images you have clearly painstakingly created, but for me, it's the writing and story development here that makes this stand out!
thank you. hopefully it continues to get better. I'm still really new at this
You nailed my thoughts to a T with this comment. I'm currently after the part where Braden picks out clothes and a hair cut for Zack, and I am so head over heels in love with this couple, and I really hope it ends with a happy ending once said and done. Over the years, seeing too many gay couple movies fall apart by the end, it's really become depressing. We need a happy forever and ever story for once. I just had to reply to this comment because you 1000% described my feelings about it. Thank you kindly ❣️
Ah thanks haha. Glad I'm not the only one who has been left feeling this way by it. Yes they are clearly made for each other. Rooting for them! Haha 😊
Dang man, your story really got into me.
[Warning! minor spoilers ahead, proceed cautiously.]
Almost died as they went a-hole at chap9 even fucked me up more as they'll about to get separated and i dont give a shit if its just a 20mins walk, i fucking love both of them together, and then outta nowhere here comes ash, their "spirit animal" saved both of their ass from near relationship death. Well done to the story btw, im looking forward to your future works. Keep it up mah man!
heh, thanks for the love. i'm glad you enjoyed it. You may wanna put a note on your post about spoilers though so you dont ruin somebody's day
Please android version, this game is awesome.
it's on the list. few people have requested this. i'm gonna push it up a bit and see what we can do
I came into this novel when chapter 9 was being worked on.
I will gladly admit that when I came across this novel, I was looking for something raunchy.
I even skipped through so much dialogue thinking that there would be sex scenes involved eventually. However, after chapter 9 came out, the ending for Chapter 9's (pervy) really surprised me. It made something click that this was actually a serious and GOOD novel.
So I went back and went with the (Respect) route, boy am I glad.
Once the prologue was done, the story really started to hit me.
This story has me so hooked I keep wanting more.
I am checking everyday for updates on how the chapter(s) are going.
It is a book I want to keep turning the pages of, that never ends.
I want to follow these two until their entire lives are at an end of old age. To see their character development.
With that said, creativity takes time. (but not too much time! lol)
Novels like these that explore the depths of sexuality and character development are what I thrive on.
There is so much to learn and explain through experiences.
I know this novel must end at some point, but writing like this, with such character growth, is an art to be encouraged.
If this is a career you wish to endeavor, I say keep encouraging yourself to explore it.
This novel alone, shows the ability to express emotion, experiences, and individuality.
-My take away from the story-
The fact that these two became comfortable with each other's sexuality really spoke to me.
I'm a gay man most people think is straight, have sexual anxiety, and I'm also a very openly sexual person; I mean in the way that I am very comfortable with conversations about sex .
Not many people are, and the growth between these two really showed that it is okay to talk about your feelings regarding sexuality and relationships.
Braden in particular, I think, is a wonderful character development.
It really shows how much sexuality is not black and white.
You do not need to be gay in order to love someone of the same sex, even if it is one or two person(s).
It is the same for a vice versa situation. e.g. woman loving a man while typically loving women.
The labels of sexuality are too much confined into a box, labeled as such, and too many people are discouraged from exploring their love and desires because they have been taught there are only a few ways your sexuality can go.
If you love one thing, one or several times, it does not define you indefinitely.
It also discourages people talking about such things and then eventually have that eat away at them.
It may sound hippie, but you literally can love ANYONE.
Even discussing same sex with a person who typically loves the opposite sex is okay, but too often those person(s) feel out of place because they feel if they go down that route it will define them and immediately put a generic label on them.
Relationships are not only about wanting sex, it is about choosing a life partner. Even if you love a man or a woman, that does not mean you can only love "that side".
-What I personally wish for the two characters (though clearly the author is doing a good job as it is)-
I think there should be a scene(s) showing that Braden DOES indeed like women still. I don't wish for "cheating", but even a comment or glance at a beautiful woman would solidify the fact that he is not "turning gay"
I also hope these two do not end this relationship forever.
There is too much invested between the two of them to simply throw away and claim it as a "friendship"
Though i believe friends of any gender can be close as these two have expressed outside of the "sex" scenes.
I believe it would be sad for these two to grow so entwined together that they do not commit to each other as life partners.
Though this is not intended as a "porn" novel it would be fantastic to see a few sex scenes between these two, only to show how much they love and care about having the other "feel good".
I say a few only in the fact to show it is not a "one time thing" and that they are actually expressing their love to each other this way.
Either way, keep up the fantastic job, keep growing this art; if you wish.
You've got one of several fans in your court!
wow, sooo much going on here. I can tell the story impacted you and I take it as a compliment that the ending of chapter 9 made you go back and actually read through everything.
I'm glad you're open to the lot of what the story is suggesting; and while the themes in the game aren't meant to be preachy, I hope they lay a foundation for others to start from if they've faced their own struggles; a blueprint if you will. While it's adult oriented, there really is an intention to break new ground with this game and do something special so thanks for giving it a second shot ( i know the beginning is weak). I appreciate the support and I really appreciated the lengthy input and reaction to this project so thank you sincerely.
this game resonated with me enough that i created an account to leave a comment/review, which is saying something because i'm really socially awkward.
i really related to zack because his emotional experience with braden reminded me so much of something i've been through, and it made me cry, and it's kind of painful and i just love this so much. when i first started to play, the writing immediately captured me because it was funny and clever, and it's only gotten better as i've played. i downloaded the game for something quick and sexy, but this is so much more, and it's really a beautiful story. i haven't reached chapter nine yet, but i already can't wait for you to continue.
I always love these messages where people signed up just to comment. that means a lot. Sorry about the crying but i'm glad it hit you on that level. It's been kinda fun turning the genre upside down. I hope you enjoy chapter 9, too. I think it turned out alright :)
i did get through chapter one and ash is the most absolutely adorable character ever. i love him with all my heart, and i love the game even more if possible.
heh, he's a trip :p
Ok and now that I'm all caught up to chapter nine the story is even better wow
heh, chapter 9 ended up being one of my favs
This game was the first game I've ever played in my life that compelled me to write an actually review, even tho my review was pretty short. I downloaded this at first expecting a quick and hot short story but I was blown away at how complex it was and how it made me feel. I honestly thing I've even learned some things about myself from Zack's story and I can't wait to play more!
I really appreciate this. This is def one of the things that I was after. I wanted to make people think and I wanted to show the progression of someone accepting themselves rather than just relying on lame concepts like having "pride," "acceptance," or even "love" for yourself. While those are solid goals, sometimes people have a really hard time understanding how to get from where they are to that point and we really don't see good ways to do that. I really wanted to show a realistic progression. Now whether that applies to everyone or not, who knows...but maybe if it gives people a template, it can help them find their own way :)